Peer+review+for+Jennifer,+Angela,+Holly,+Whitney+and+Min+Jee's

Well done, a very strong science digital story. The deign and technical quality is excellent considering that this is the first time you have done a digital story in science. The narration is clear and I like how all of you spoke. Next time you might like to add music. Check out how the Blue team incorporated this into their digital story. You used still frames effectively to show the different parts of the process and enhance your communication. Some things to consider for next time. 1. Take care to ensure that the products in a chemical reaction are separated by a + sign, not an = sign. 2. Your method could have been further improved by explaining in more detail how you did the dilutions. 3. Tables need to have a concise and descriptive title at the top of the table that relates the dependent and independent variables. Remember that data tables which show the data you collected come before your graphs. 4. Don't forget that the axes of graphs have the unit of measurement in brackets and that all graphs are called figures. 5 .Next time remember to suggest a further question or idea for an investigation related to this topic. 6. Don't forget to credit the adults who helped you, like Mr May and Mr Utecht. //Ms Jordan//

Hi Fellow Scientists! You guys did a good job on your video! I really liked how well you explained your procedure, I would have no problem following these directions in order to recreate the experiment, however when you created the different solutions by diluting, the instructions became a little bit difficult to follow. I noticed that your chemical equation needs to be fixed a little. Also, your graphs/tables need titles and it would be nice if you could explain what the axes represented when the data is presented to us. You did not suggest how you would further expand on the topic you discussed or how to fix some of the experimental errors that were present. Overall though, you guys did an awesome job coordinating sound with video and had very clear demonstrations on how the experiment took place. A Job Well Done! //Jessica Hao//

Hi! Dear Scientists! I love your video! It's amazingly done with through procedure for the experiment and outstanding film-making skills. The narrative is clear and concise. Reviewing your video, I find some little mistakes that you make, hope you can pay attention to them next time! 1. Each filter paper that is used in the experiment should be measured seperately before you filter the product of your experiment. I don't see any explanation of this procedure in your video. I think you just mess up the procedure while making the film, hope that you don't make this mistake in your real experiment. 2. The tape that you use to cover the erlenmyer flask needs to be mentioned in your material list. 3. You don't mention that the procedure needs to be repeated for different times, you may probably want to use few sentences explaining the different trials that you are doing. 4. Also, if you can suggest a further question or topic that people can research on, it will be even more wonderful! Overall, I really like your video and your experiment. Hope to see your next movie coming out!
 * Lily Feng**